it's tweet, really. :D

Nice turn at the end, a charming little ode to the cat. I see a certain stealth-of-movement within the meter which creeps rather cat-like, although I think you could play around with it a little more.

Interesting that you don't punctuate the last line. It suggests that he's ugly (when) naked. If so, what is he the rest of the time? Beautiful? Or just hidden? Nice and concise.

Can you not find something better to do? Jeezus H. Christ old boy! This simply shows a lack of talent. You make attacks, the attacks are ultimately childish. You can not even muster enough intellect to form a parody. What is wrong with you? Is it vindictive senility? Probably. I agree with the Half-Italian, the title should be renamed Rockmage. Then and only then will I give a vote of ten. No Vote.

Pick an image. Any image, it doesn't have to be spectacularly original at this point. Perhaps the key would be a good one to use. Try to write something which just revolves around the key; be consistent (a lot of this poem is fragmented and unconnected except through the loose and quite vague emotions). Use either the key or door (or anything associated with whichever tactile object you pick) to represent you, and find similarities. What that should do, with a bit of practise, is help make the feelings that you put in come across with a bit more subtlety. In turn, that'll make the reader more likely to emphasise. If you say "I hurt", well I might nod sympathetically - but beyond that I can't connect with it; I can't relate to it (to use an old cliche). The best way to find out what works for you in poetry is to read plenty of it - find a genre you're likely to enjoy and have a go. Perhaps Sylvia Plath would be a good starting point from the evidence of this poem, or Poe if you want something more elaborate and gothic. Anyway, so sayeth -=Ranger=-. Hope it's of help.

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I think you are trying tooo hard.

Haikus arn't short enuf. Actually I like it! I would name this 'rockmage' though. :)

I think there are much more interesting things about cats.

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This is very funny and creative.

I wrote this back in September, when my life started unraveling. I'm not sure if it's any good, but I would like feedback. thanks.

tee, it's cute.

whoa, way too long.

it's a good poem 7

introspective, similar to the way learning portait artists often subconsciously capture their own likenesses within the faces of the subjects.

if you want to really make a go of these, at least make them forceful; say something. for instance, why ask one to "consider a life" that is "pathetically pointless"? the effort of reading that weak attack is just such an action.

redundant reptetives are foolish, especially in a form that limits the use of words to create a full image.

'fraid you inspired me to write a poem on the emperor, thanks!

Bare.