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Free verse № 151641

new clothes, same old story

by nypoet22

Member since 2006 · Posted 25 Apr 2007 · Edited 26 Apr 2007 · 7 comments

emperor passed stood on his stool tidy, full, manifest a cheer of castanets repressed the voice that dared call him ugly naked

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[9] jessicazee 26-Apr-07/2:48 AM Reply
do you mean castanets? (sp I think?) Like the finger cymbals? Or maybe I don't know what a castinette is? Serious.
Also, I love the last line so much. Could omit both periods.
[n/a] nypoet22 › jessicazee 26-Apr-07/11:28 AM Reply
spelling error corrected, punctuation suggestion implemented. 'a' changed to 'the.' thanks.
[6] thetrev 28-Apr-07/2:18 PM Reply
'fraid you inspired me to write a poem on the emperor, thanks!
[5] half.italian 28-Apr-07/7:10 PM Reply
Bare.
[8] Ranger 29-Apr-07/2:05 PM Reply
Interesting that you don't punctuate the last line. It suggests that he's ugly (when) naked. If so, what is he the rest of the time? Beautiful? Or just hidden?

Nice and concise.
[7] richa 30-Apr-07/3:42 AM Reply
Why 'passed'.
[n/a] nypoet22 › richa 30-Apr-07/5:55 PM Reply
possibly passed by, on his way to stand on a chair and perform. possibly passed excrement and stood on that. possibly both at the same time, at least metaphorically.