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new clothes, same old story (Free verse) by nypoet22
emperor passed stood on his stool tidy, full, manifest a cheer of castanets repressed the voice that dared call him ugly naked
Up the ladder: Dreams and Galaxies
Down the ladder: Go now if you want it.
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Arithmetic Mean: 5.6
Weighted score: 5.0715218
Overall Rank: 6607
Posted: April 25, 2007 6:01 PM PDT; Last modified: April 26, 2007 11:28 AM PDT
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[9] jessicazee @ 24.160.240.223 | 26-Apr-07/2:48 AM | Reply
do you mean castanets? (sp I think?) Like the finger cymbals? Or maybe I don't know what a castinette is? Serious.
Also, I love the last line so much. Could omit both periods.
[n/a] nypoet22 @ 65.9.210.180 > jessicazee | 26-Apr-07/11:28 AM | Reply
spelling error corrected, punctuation suggestion implemented. 'a' changed to 'the.' thanks.
[6] thetrev @ 86.20.231.0 | 28-Apr-07/2:18 PM | Reply
'fraid you inspired me to write a poem on the emperor, thanks!
[5] half.italian @ 76.172.249.205 | 28-Apr-07/7:10 PM | Reply
Bare.
[8] Ranger @ 81.103.124.179 | 29-Apr-07/2:05 PM | Reply
Interesting that you don't punctuate the last line. It suggests that he's ugly (when) naked. If so, what is he the rest of the time? Beautiful? Or just hidden?

Nice and concise.
[7] richa @ 81.179.247.122 | 30-Apr-07/3:42 AM | Reply
Why 'passed'.
[n/a] nypoet22 @ 70.146.88.117 > richa | 30-Apr-07/5:55 PM | Reply
possibly passed by, on his way to stand on a chair and perform. possibly passed excrement and stood on that. possibly both at the same time, at least metaphorically.
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