... cheer up; can't be that bad!

absolutely

poweful opening swooned into greeting-card land

lol

an unwinding coil, eh? ... wassat? helium whispers is nice

empathically inclined to vote eight, but just can't

the perfect haiku

Awful moaning in the backyard. Coital ecstacy.

I like some of the images, but they don't really join into a whole. Is this love? "surgeons on my father" says gentle to me, which is what I think you are going for. At the same time, the image of surgeons on my father reminds me of blood and sickness, rather than love. What are "English" hands? "slave", "voil", "blinded", "average" All those words in this poem just confuse me.

Lousy title.

Very clever. I quite like it.

kinda nice

yuk but adequate

cutting edge improvisational phrasing with retro hip-hop under and overtones

aaaahhh .... absolutely nice; hardly a poem of any great worth, though

the poetry seemed to dry up after you came;... never mind, ... happens to all of us :-)

fabulous concept not done full justice by this poem

got lost in the hims and yous in the final couplet

... yeah but whats it all mean? and is it Art? :-/... yes I'm sure it is :-)

string band school of creative writing seems like