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All Alone (Free verse) by QuirkyWonder
You're eyes are bleeding A deep red ribbon You're heart is crying A deep blue ocean But emersed into your pain Is where you lost all your emotions You've lost all control To the voice within You're rambling words are echoed Against your hollow soul You've lost yourself in darkness Behind the walls of the rest You're trying to climb over But you seem to just keep falling Back into the darkness In the loneliness of yourself

Up the ladder: The Red Chain
Down the ladder: Some Suburban Clarity

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Arithmetic Mean: 4.6666665
Weighted score: 4.9103527
Overall Rank: 9689
Posted: May 1, 2004 9:03 PM PDT; Last modified: May 1, 2004 9:03 PM PDT
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[6] deleted user @ 68.66.196.168 | 2-May-04/9:05 AM | Reply
Thank you for describing me so well. Please tell me how I am different, and how you know so much about me. Actually, I think this sort of thing is best written in the first person, unless you give the reasons that compell you to so describe another.
[n/a] QuirkyWonder @ 198.81.26.80 > deleted user | 2-May-04/5:36 PM | Reply
I prefer to write my poems in the third person because I enjoy reading poems that seem like they are written about me.
[n/a] Shuushin @ 207.5.211.177 > QuirkyWonder | 2-May-04/7:12 PM | Reply
This poem (and apparently those poems you like) is second person.

Third person would be "he", "she", "they", "[person's name]"

First person was like your reply (above).
[1] edpeterson @ 68.79.20.161 | 3-May-04/11:05 AM | Reply
put down the pen.. and slowly back away from the paper. Pick up a chair and begin to bludgeon yourself until you can no longer stand.
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