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Cold (Free verse) by horus8
Pounded thin through splitting blue light Shafts refract and condense me in crystal. Electrolytes and long inescapable pauses direct me from line to line, sight to sight. Layer upon layer of frozen idea and tissue... If I were to bend but an inch, this would be over. Another mad dream in another false flash Like young love under exploding glacier. Floe to floe, following the North star home Back to a place where no sun finds night.

Up the ladder: There can be only one
Down the ladder: My Apology

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Arithmetic Mean: 7.5
Weighted score: 6.8276463
Overall Rank: 363
Posted: April 29, 2004 12:03 AM PDT; Last modified: April 29, 2004 12:20 PM PDT
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[7] wFraser Allonby Q.C.w @ 195.157.153.253 | 29-Apr-04/5:54 AM | Reply
You'll appreciate this ...

http://www.pix8.net/files/brantcam.jpg
[n/a] horus8 @ 66.229.187.185 > wFraser Allonby Q.C.w | 29-Apr-04/10:41 AM | Reply
Why, because I did that to my mom?
[8] SupremeDreamer @ 66.81.157.21 | 29-Apr-04/4:10 PM | Reply
Over all.. its different. I mean to say that its apart from your usual style of penning; its a good read never-the-less.

Blessed with eight.
[9] <~> @ 64.252.164.251 | 29-Apr-04/5:35 PM | Reply
yes.
[8] ggawrysi @ 147.9.151.22 | 2-May-04/12:34 AM | Reply
i'm not sure where "electrolytes" fits in beyond flowing via syllables and assonance... that is, the meaning of the word. beyond my nit-pickyness, well put together.
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