Cold

Member since 2002 · Posted 29 Apr 2004 · Edited 29 Apr 2004 · 5 comments

Pounded thin through splitting blue light Shafts refract and condense me in crystal. Electrolytes and long inescapable pauses direct me from line to line, sight to sight. Layer upon layer of frozen idea and tissue... If I were to bend but an inch, this would be over. Another mad dream in another false flash Like young love under exploding glacier. Floe to floe, following the North star home Back to a place where no sun finds night.

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[7] wFraser Allonby Q.C.w 29-Apr-04/5:54 AM Reply

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[n/a] horus8 › wFraser Allonby Q.C.w 29-Apr-04/10:41 AM Reply

Why, because I did that to my mom?

[8] SupremeDreamer 29-Apr-04/4:10 PM Reply

Over all.. its different. I mean to say that its apart from your usual style of penning; its a good read never-the-less.

Blessed with eight.

[9] <~> 29-Apr-04/5:35 PM Reply

yes.

[8] ggawrysi 2-May-04/12:34 AM Reply

i'm not sure where "electrolytes" fits in beyond flowing via syllables and assonance... that is, the meaning of the word. beyond my nit-pickyness, well put together.