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Lemons Don't Grow (Free verse) by Blindpoetry
Please don't bring me down
I'm growing to tall
Please don't bring me down
Your short posture is killing me
(its knife is sharp for its kind)
Find a tissue to be your ladder
Wipe the liquid from your face
Spawn solids so you won't sink
When you try to stand on them
(you'll grow up)
Kill the ocean; don't help it
Your salty onions could feed a million fish
Standing still forgot how to grow
And walking forgot how to wait for the other
(standing still soul)
Your face it to red
I can't look at you
You were stung by the other bee
The bee who could see
(where he was going)
I was blind; I could not see what I had
Finding this place was accidental - I was lead by the sadness
Just looking for happiness
I guess irony could be the case from both of us
(We both bleed from the wound I created)
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Arithmetic Mean: 6.7777777
Weighted score: 5.888889
Overall Rank: 1501
Posted: April 10, 2004 7:10 PM PDT; Last modified: April 10, 2004 7:10 PM PDT
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"Your face [is] [too] red"
"salty onions" is an interesting idea. But, man - this is wordily convoluted - whats it all mean?
It means I'm in grief and sorry for the sadness I started...
...I think, anyways....
I'd think its done - until after posting do I see more mistakes...