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About men in toilets (Free verse) by scitz
Drunk and desperate to piss I queued for the urinal Men stared at each others cocks Pissing on their trousers and fingers bypassing the soap dispenser then going outside to shake a friends hand. The yellow tide of alcohol flowed As I stood in sick and wet tissues Watching white toothed framed fresh faces And silicone enhanced models advertize beer I wanted to be like them But I was very very drunk However I was missing machismo For I washed my hands, Waited for someone to open the door so i could snake through the gap and not touch the wet handle covered in spit, sick and crap. Men in toilets pick their asses Then go outside to grope the blonde who passes. Beware of the man who waits at the bar Who stares at you just about to smoke he has a bus pass but says he has a car And always tells you someone else's joke. He's the one who wants to take you home the one who pissed on his trousers So ladies make sure you leave alone And let him leave with piss stained pants and a five inch prowess.

Up the ladder: Punk Ass
Down the ladder: Henrietta IV

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Arithmetic Mean: 6.25
Weighted score: 5.1490035
Overall Rank: 5332
Posted: March 25, 2004 12:10 PM PST; Last modified: March 25, 2004 12:10 PM PST
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[8] Shuushin @ 147.154.235.53 | 25-Mar-04/12:18 PM | Reply
Last stanza is fairly good - did you start with that one at first?

Prolly sould be cut down by a third overall.
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