poemranker ::Reunion by syrusstone

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Free verse № 94949

Reunion

Member since 2004 · Posted 24 Mar 2004 · 5 comments

Seduced by the promise of another doomed tomorrow, I hum the first tune which exploded from the tip of my forked tounge. One word at a time I heard the syllables die, each already regretting yesterday in the midst of her future lullabye. I savor the fragmented memories spiked with fingernail files and stray hair ribbons red because blood loves passion. I'm allowed to enter to her hearts discontent. She peeks reluctantly behind a sweaty palm with one angry eye the other in love. She won't stay long. She doesn't feel welcome. She is not. Our dance stagnates. My humming is now routine bound by ten years of tar-pit good intentions stuck at the knees locked and wordless in a time when the diving swallow found the ground.

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[8] zodiac 25-Mar-04/6:32 AM Reply
Tongue. Tongue, tongue, tongue.
[8] zodiac › zodiac 25-Mar-04/2:49 PM Reply
It's tongue. Not tounge. Tounge sounds like a lounge in town. I never go into town.
[8] Shuushin › zodiac 25-Mar-04/3:23 PM Reply
not after that whole "I thought he was a girl" thing back in '93
[8] Shuushin 25-Mar-04/6:36 AM Reply
hmmmm.... some line breaks would give this a better flow.

Some fresh thoughts on a pretty common theme.
[n/a] wFraser Allonby Q.C.w 25-Mar-04/9:26 AM Reply
Zounds!