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I think of you (Free verse) by singinkygal What do I do when I want to smile but all
I can do is cry
I think of you
What do I do when I'm alone for a while and
I miss you so much I could die
I think of you
What do I do when I know that you are miles
away and I would give anything just to hold you
I think of you
What do I do when I have doubt and can't say
anything to make it go away
I remember that there is you
and then I think of us
Up the ladder:
Cynical?
Down the ladder:
Las Vegas
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Posted: March 15, 2004 4:37 PM PST; Last modified: March 15, 2004 4:37 PM PSTWeighted score: 5.1430435 Overall Rank: 5415 The following users have marked this poem on their favorites list:
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zodiac @ 152.18.129.57
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15-Mar-04/4:59 PM
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I read your username as Sin-Gin-KY[Jelly]-Gal. I would strongly recommend rewriting this poem with one of those images/topics as a central figure - a leitmotif, if you will. By the way, leitmotif is your word for the day. Have a nice one. -7-
A nice heartfelt piece. I enjoyed the opening line especially.
Great use of 'die' to rhyme with 'cry'!!!!!1111 -10-
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