Oh dear its going to be messy if the cohorts turn up. Don't say i didn't warn you. They've taken all my pride, stripped me naked and whipped me with cruel words, but i like a good tongue lashing so i stayed.

Are you implying that -=Dark_Angel=- is a 'cohort', and moreover that he would criticise such a beautiful, sensual poeme such as this? On the contrary, Sir! This poeme is splendid indeede! I will give a line by line account of why I strongly believe that this is the finest love poeme ever written. Uh-um. Line 1: Bitter love and separation. The two crucial elements to a love poem with any dramatic and emotional tension. 2. Tentative release and the beginning of acceptance and healing. This is the next step, and allows the reader a small sandbar of hope after the crushing wave of sorrow in line 1. Line 3: The writer tries to rationalise the tersity of the breakup, even though he/she wishes it would go on for longer deep in his/her heart. Line 4: Further rationalisation, using a beautiful metaphor - string, heartstrings - I do believe this is my favourite love poem metaphor. A true classic. Line 5: Oh fuck it I can't be arsed. This is the most awful load of complete arse-cake I've ever read. You dunce, Songstar. This is terrible. It's so cliched Skeletor could shake his fist at it and curse and it wouldn't even blink. It's pointless, obvious, generic, meaningless, dull, badly written, frustrating, ill-thought-out, self-indulgent and, above all, it's exactly the sort of poeme that I'd expect someone who's had the most generic breakup ever to write. I'm going to stop commenting now for fear that I say something I will regret.

And Bachus falls in love once again. Songstar you sure have a way with words gurl. Why dontcha stand up for daddy and do a little twirl. If I had my way you'd be the new spice girl

No Jo, you could not possible be a cohort, or are you a l33t speaking urban masiff. I was refering to the usual suspects many of whom would jump at the chance - cohort implies a group mister 90. Disconnected again damn you mercury

Yes...clearly 'cohort' implies a group somewhere. But why does that mean that -=Dark_Angel=- couldn't be a cohort? Is -=Dark_Angel=- not part of a group? Does he not bleed? Where is your sense of compassion, man? Your sense of humility?! I swear to God, as soon as I get out of here I'm setting up a little shop, selling Shoe-hornes for all who require aid in dressing.

show me your horn and i will us it. I know, I know, but i'm juvenile i can't help it

check out www.poetry.com where my poem is featured in their latest publishment(Letters from the soul)..and copyrighted, and chosen as a semi finalist for the International Open Poetry contest(July 2002) and also drawn into the Final competition which was in July 2002, and I was also invited to the International Society of Poety's Convention and Symposium in Washington DC this year. So, at least somebody appreciates my work...

Yeah... That's actually total bollocks, isn't it? And even if it's true, the thing about poetry.com is they have three rules: 1) Publish anything 2) Publish everything 3) Publish it as fast as you fucking can. So it really wouldn't be too surprising or interesting. What *is* interested is where exactly this poeme is. Is it this one or a different one? Not because I doubt you, because I would never dare doubt the word of such a clearly talented poete, but, for example, what's your name? Poetry.com doesn't let you search by poem title. Where's the list of poemes for that book? Etc. You don't seem to be in the list of poets by region when I click on Australia. That's funny.

sounds like it's been a while since you unwrapped a package.

and for a $30 fee, you can copyright anything.

oh yeah, poetry.com...i've got 2 poems in that book...actually, i've got one coming out on the new cd The Sound of Poetry...its professional and everything! i'm TWITerpated...anyway, image is nothing, thirst is everything...WRITE! goddamn i need to lay off the acid.

...i forgot to mention in my last ramble, but -=Dark_Angel=- inspired my poetic tones to write a pile of garbage to www.poetry.com and see how far it makes it...i'll keep you all posted.