Poemranker [Replying] Sat May 18 20:42:14 PDT 2024

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Kiss me good bye and walk away. Don't turn back, just keep on walking. Don't wanna get hurt. Don't wanna hurt you. It's too hard to pull it back together with string. Just leave it hanging there, something ever lasting, always a memory. One sweet memeory, one sweet kiss. It's all been there like a package unwrapped.

-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.

15-Aug-02/6:01 PM

Are you implying that -=Dark_Angel=- is a 'cohort', and moreover that he would criticise such a beautiful, sensual poeme such as this? On the contrary, Sir! This poeme is splendid indeede! I will give a line by line account of why I strongly believe that this is the finest love poeme ever written. Uh-um. Line 1: Bitter love and separation. The two crucial elements to a love poem with any dramatic and emotional tension. 2. Tentative release and the beginning of acceptance and healing. This is the next step, and allows the reader a small sandbar of hope after the crushing wave of sorrow in line 1. Line 3: The writer tries to rationalise the tersity of the breakup, even though he/she wishes it would go on for longer deep in his/her heart. Line 4: Further rationalisation, using a beautiful metaphor - string, heartstrings - I do believe this is my favourite love poem metaphor. A true classic. Line 5: Oh fuck it I can't be arsed. This is the most awful load of complete arse-cake I've ever read. You dunce, Songstar. This is terrible. It's so cliched Skeletor could shake his fist at it and curse and it wouldn't even blink. It's pointless, obvious, generic, meaningless, dull, badly written, frustrating, ill-thought-out, self-indulgent and, above all, it's exactly the sort of poeme that I'd expect someone who's had the most generic breakup ever to write. I'm going to stop commenting now for fear that I say something I will regret.

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