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Greeny nature (Haiku) by chigurukala In hamlet green farm
Shaking head to cool breeze
As green waves.
....Bollimuntha venkata ramana
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Oh holy shit
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I Love You, My Angel
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Posted: March 25, 2002 1:10 AM PST; Last modified: March 25, 2002 1:10 AM PSTWeighted score: 3.6699636 Overall Rank: 13560 Comments:
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5-Apr-02/5:41 PM
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I'm afraid I don't get this at all. Each of the lines I can take individually, and I suppose there's a single image presented, but the image doesn't do anything for me... I don't understand why I'm being presented the image, if I'm supposed to take meaning from it or enjoy it or... [I don't find beauty in it to enjoy...]
Main complaint here is haiku should be 5,7,5 you have
5,6,3. Although I could be wrong. I'm not counting that last line because I'm not certain what it is, is it actually part of the poem, or something else?
sorry i don't get this
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