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Sawdust (Free verse) by New Life Drug
The Red Mark, its changing And its fading who we are The Red Mark, its coming and we dont know who we are We take the Red Mark, every morning we take it everyday We're happy because of the Red Mark We take it again and we're happy for another day The Red Mark helps us from not jumping off the bridge and its taking who we used to be The Red Mark, its fading me because the world is left with simple smiles We are so happy, and its so haunting The Red Mark made me who I am today And the Red Mark makes us so sheltered because we cover the darkness and take away the pain Now the world is so happy, we're so social now we are Thank you Red Mark for all these happy faces, and these happy places, we' ve come so far We are lost, and we don't know it, in our brains we take away the hell. Because we're mental, mental with sadness Thank you Red Mark for making it all seem so well I love you final sanity I love you simple solution I love you. Lift me from dispair Red Mark where would I be if you weren't there Can we ask ourselves "where would we be if you weren't there?" Hey everybody tell me where would we be if it wasn't there. Now I can't come, but thats okay. We all need children to stay away from the hay anyway.

Up the ladder: Rainbow
Down the ladder: Escape

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Arithmetic Mean: 4.0
Weighted score: 4.880797
Overall Rank: 10076
Posted: August 9, 2002 5:01 PM PDT; Last modified: August 9, 2002 5:01 PM PDT
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[0] horus8 @ 24.126.113.154 | 9-Aug-02/7:55 PM | Reply
i wanted to give you a ten, but then your overall score would have sky rocketed.this is a pure crack in your skull.. truly..i see too much light for your age..i must humble you..i must humble myself..do i have to be a redmark too? yes, i think i do..(this little diddy is fuckingkiller) you win the HORUS 8 TEN THAT GOT A ZERO FOR NO GOOD REASON AWARD CUZ ITS TOO GOOD ..don't worry others will come and bring much fruit to your alter, and i predict this will be on the top fifteen list before any of mine(honestly i don't pay attention, really) trust me..i am a ranc-amateur with hardly any real grasp of creative writing, but fuckin aye i can clam like a mad man. this is a wonderfull poem???
[n/a] New Life Drug @ | 15-Aug-02/9:15 PM | Reply
gee, thanks! (sarcasm)
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