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~haiku~ (Haiku) by Entelechist
The sky weeps with rain brimfulls of liquid sadness A tear drop drowns the world

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Arithmetic Mean: 6.6
Weighted score: 5.190725
Overall Rank: 4697
Posted: December 8, 2003 3:29 PM PST; Last modified: December 8, 2003 3:29 PM PST
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[n/a] richa @ 81.178.227.42 | 8-Dec-03/3:52 PM | Reply
Liquid sadness is a little crude a description. A teardrop drowns the world? why rain (the sky weeps) does not drown the word.

I know what you are trying to say but it just doesn't seem to track.
[n/a] grumpycrafter @ 141.158.84.92 | 8-Dec-03/5:04 PM | Reply
So, this is haiku. It's certainly discriptive.
[8] kingit @ 67.69.62.220 | 8-Dec-03/9:07 PM | Reply
This works for me-8.
[n/a] Entelechist @ 193.131.186.150 | 9-Dec-03/1:23 AM | Reply
Hi Richa,
Thanks for making a comment on this Haiku. I agree with you that a haiku has to be self-explanatory to work, so I won't try and explain the last line. Glad you got some inkling of the sentiments behind it.
Happy scribbling.
[8] horus8 @ 24.126.116.54 | 10-Dec-03/4:08 PM | Reply
~ I hate curly accentuations, but here's an 8
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