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~haiku~ (Haiku) by Entelechist The sky weeps with rain
brimfulls of liquid sadness
A tear drop drowns the world
Up the ladder:
Emily Gray
Down the ladder:
If time can not persuade, then one must goad.
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Arithmetic Mean: 6.6
Posted: December 8, 2003 3:29 PM PST; Last modified: December 8, 2003 3:29 PM PSTWeighted score: 5.190725 Overall Rank: 4721 Comments:
So, this is haiku. It's certainly discriptive.
This works for me-8.
Hi Richa,
Thanks for making a comment on this Haiku. I agree with you that a haiku has to be self-explanatory to work, so I won't try and explain the last line. Glad you got some inkling of the sentiments behind it. Happy scribbling.
~ I hate curly accentuations, but here's an 8
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I know what you are trying to say but it just doesn't seem to track.