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~haiku~ (Haiku) by Entelechist

The sky weeps with rain brimfulls of liquid sadness A tear drop drowns the world

richa 8-Dec-03/3:52 PM
Liquid sadness is a little crude a description. A teardrop drowns the world? why rain (the sky weeps) does not drown the word.

I know what you are trying to say but it just doesn't seem to track.




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