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A Voice Found (Lyric) by Blake
I cry "One further joy, before return! With love aside, what else is there to yearn?" With stride and muscles limber, I streak past The sapling green, marking my record last. The air is sweet, as pure as season gives, I taste of sweat; my breast new-fired, lives And burns delightfully. I race erect, And statuesque. I pause a moment to inspect My rippling form, and glance upward. The sky Had never seemed as clear, to clearer eye. A flock of birds across the expanse plays, The air filling with melody. In daze, I blink, and look upon the path ahead. What follows can barely by words be said. The trees, a panoply of green and gold, Gave setting lush, glorious to behold, To the loveliest music ears had heard: A voice so perfect, I at first demurred, And thought it exhaustion's fantasy. But no, It still remained, and sang from high to low, Its voice stronger than deepest-throated yell. But it sang with such a gentleness, as well, To grasp it truly, one needs must compound An angel's horn with newborn's coo. The sound I first faint heard, and sought to reach, A sentiment my body would impeach; For, as I realized, I would soon succumb, Since sinews, unlike brains, are not struck dumb. I staggered back, my feet and face red, glowing Contented with a secret beyond knowing. In the time I had stood hearing, passing brief, I left much to uncertainty. In chief, I did not know what sublime words were sung As I entranced, the grove of trees among, Had labored so to capture that singer. ( I saw not the source's gender, either.) If you're inclined my memory to fault, And take my account with a grain of salt, Think on how well your recollections age: A decade past does not ease to the page. So now you learn my first love's beginning: That from this clouded throat, a Voice will sing.

Up the ladder: HERE TO THERE
Down the ladder: Choices

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Arithmetic Mean: 3.0
Weighted score: 4.462117
Overall Rank: 12861
Posted: July 29, 2002 10:14 AM PDT; Last modified: July 29, 2002 10:14 AM PDT
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[1] horus8 @ 24.126.113.154 | 29-Jul-02/2:30 PM | Reply
My "rippling form"? my..my.. you are a poettie. bravo. ripple on. maybe perchance Yeats and Keats with ripple with you. never. you still fail.flush. you are not hoof, beware.
[10] pitchblackdisaster @ 195.92.168.173 | 17-Aug-02/6:01 PM | Reply
brilliant
[0] deleted user @ 67.40.59.14 | 17-Aug-02/8:25 PM | Reply
I'm not so sure this is brilliant and I hope this phase of your writing is passing. I realize reading the literary elite if Great Britain, especially in high school, can change our perspective greatly. Make us see the literary light, so to speak. In addition, it is important to try every convention that suits you, but maybe it is best left as practice. Besides being a very poor attempt at recreating style, the poem is filled with simple mistakes of language and numerous contradictions that when put together make the poem bounce off itself. It goes nowhere and sounds incredibly adolescent, even if it is wrapped in the antiquated language. See, they were using their own language. It was natural to them. Here it seems like you opened a Lit book, learned some new words and headed for the typewriter.
[n/a] Blake @ | 18-Aug-02/7:06 AM | Reply
I hoped someone would ask...this is a recalled memory of the age of six...I wasn't trying to make it Joycean, per se. It's a personal catharsis poem, which has apparent contradictions as a result of what wasn't directly mentioned. I posted it to see how it would fare stylistically. Before I remove my work, to revise it, I was wondering it you had any recommendations. (I fully intend to write magazine-worthy iambic pentameter.)
[0] Bachus @ 24.126.113.154 | 18-Aug-02/8:04 AM | Reply
that's it i'm just going to turn all fucking "bvlakish poets on this site into earth talker until my comment is returned you fucking droll, booooorrring,. peach colored poets...GANGBOX

Fuck you
I'm so fucking sick of you
And your fucking pathetic
Way of thinking
So go fuck yourself
And while you're at it
Take your lame fucking people with you
I'm sick of their
Fucking mindless chatter
You force your demented fucking chaos
Onto me
And into me
So here's some back your way
You stupid fucking control freak
If I catch you even fucking thinking about me
I will hunt your fucking tainted ass down
And sodomize you
And every other fucking innocent bystander
Directly
Or indirectly
In my way
Do I make myself fucking clear?
Are you catching my fucking drift?
How fucking retarded were you
At the fucking time
When you created
This fucking fuck-fest
Of a place
You have us firmly planted in
You fucking pestilence
With no cure
Fuck you
I say
Fuck you

JBH 2-97
[4] Jeremi B. Handrinos @ 24.126.116.54 | 9-Nov-03/5:05 AM | Reply
Congratulations on writing a totally unreadable chunk of junk dungke.
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