poemranker ::eyeh8LIEph by psikosis

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Free verse № 61647

eyeh8LIEph

by psikosis

Member since 2003 · Posted 21 Aug 2003 · 3 comments

So here we are, disguised by fate, brought together by immortal suffering. Wearing a mask of infatuation, saturation between your legs. Manipulation, mastering inferior people, say it's a lie, say it's not true, all of this is because of you. Emotional rollercoaster, spirit is hovering over me, one swift glance at you both, makes me sick. I want to gouge out my eyes, and remove my brain, to get that image out of my body. Erase it from my mental imagery, You say you don't know, maybe you just don't care, I'll unleash it all, I swear.

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3 comments

[3] DreamerSupreme 21-Aug-03/7:45 AM Reply
what the fuck are you babbling about?

"disguised by fate, brought together by immortal
suffering"

ok.. cute.. that really adds a cherry to the whole thing.. and your title is shit.

heres a 3
[8] Nirvana13666 21-Aug-03/10:58 AM Reply
Stupid fucking idiots can’t appreciate individuality. Poems don’t have to be about pretty flowers and happy thoughts. Writing is a form of expression and I think your writing is awesome because I get a feel of what you’re feeling. Your words are piercing and I truly enjoy reading your work. Don’t let these fuck turds discourage you.

Note: Creative Criticism is about helping the writer get better at his/her form of writing. When you just put a writer down you do nothing to enhance their talent.
[n/a] SupremeDreamer › Nirvana13666 21-Aug-03/1:40 PM Reply
it has nothing to do with the fact that he didnt write about flowers and happy thoughts.. not many here do.. because thats been fucking done 20000 millions times..

Nah, its because this poem is cliche, crappy, not well formed or constructed, and FAILS utterly to provide anything of value to the reader.

and man, look at what this person posted... THERES NOT AN INKLING OF HOPE. joejoe has more chances at enhancing his talent, since even his shit is alot better than this.. pfft.