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eyeh8LIEph (Free verse) by psikosis

So here we are, disguised by fate, brought together by immortal suffering. Wearing a mask of infatuation, saturation between your legs. Manipulation, mastering inferior people, say it's a lie, say it's not true, all of this is because of you. Emotional rollercoaster, spirit is hovering over me, one swift glance at you both, makes me sick. I want to gouge out my eyes, and remove my brain, to get that image out of my body. Erase it from my mental imagery, You say you don't know, maybe you just don't care, I'll unleash it all, I swear.

Nirvana13666 21-Aug-03/10:58 AM
Stupid fucking idiots can’t appreciate individuality. Poems don’t have to be about pretty flowers and happy thoughts. Writing is a form of expression and I think your writing is awesome because I get a feel of what you’re feeling. Your words are piercing and I truly enjoy reading your work. Don’t let these fuck turds discourage you.

Note: Creative Criticism is about helping the writer get better at his/her form of writing. When you just put a writer down you do nothing to enhance their talent.




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