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Breaking the wind (An Odenelle to Pirgaytes) (Villanelle) by Bachus
I woke up to the smell of lawn Face first in the dew and I wondered why my boots were gone So I broke wind with a yawn and oddly thought of you I woke up to the smell of lawn A Native with dreads said "Hey mawn" "Saw'd I what Threepke Choadke did to you!" and I wondered why my boots were gone? I felt just like a buggered prawne A map for my grass stains you did accrue I woke up to the smell of lawn "The Captain's ship did leave at dawn" Said the nigger with one shoe and I wondered why my boots were gone? The first pirgayte to dress up as Tron Curse your filthy life of poo I woke up to the smell of lawn and I wondered why my boots were gone?

Up the ladder: Portsmouth belle 3
Down the ladder: One Sided Love

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Arithmetic Mean: 7.4444447
Weighted score: 6.2222223
Overall Rank: 957
Posted: August 18, 2003 8:19 PM PDT; Last modified: August 18, 2003 8:19 PM PDT
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[n/a] Bachus @ 24.126.113.154 | 18-Aug-03/8:45 PM | Reply
I will send myself laUGHING TO HELL!
[n/a] INTRANSIT @ 64.12.96.139 > Bachus | 19-Aug-03/5:35 AM | Reply
At least you'll be laughing while the rest of us poor slobs......
[n/a] Bachus @ 24.126.113.154 > INTRANSIT | 19-Aug-03/5:18 PM | Reply
poop?
[8] richa @ 81.86.251.209 | 19-Aug-03/7:53 AM | Reply
'I woke up to the smell of lawn
I wondered why my boots were gorne?'

Is an ace rhyme

other than that you shouldn't rhyme you twice and then with poo. I guess you got bored.
[n/a] horus8 @ 24.126.113.154 > richa | 19-Aug-03/9:55 AM | Reply
Either that, or I wrote what I felt from the inner most shelfs of my hart. Care for a toot?
[n/a] Bachus @ 24.126.113.154 > richa | 19-Aug-03/5:58 PM | Reply
well that and he lost his canoe on the day we all rue. the day of toupee. Let us pray, shall weigh.
[n/a] horus8 @ 24.126.116.54 | 10-Dec-03/5:14 PM | Reply
I bet you did.
Yes.
Do you remember that time you climbed out of a tricks two story window all wiggy on the jiggy and the gutter folded and you fell. Landing on the neighbor's volkswagon sandwiching the hood, knocking yourself out and setting of the alarm for the whole complex to catch you there, sleeping like a naked hooker on the outs? Fucking wastoid. You are a defeatist!
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