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*******Perfect***** (Haiku) by Mona Lisa If I felt nothing,
Then I would be so perfect,
Yet never loved.
Up the ladder:
Nonentities
Down the ladder:
The Goodbye Hug
Votes: (green: user, blue: anonymous)
Arithmetic Mean: 6.5555553
Posted: August 12, 2003 9:11 AM PDT; Last modified: August 14, 2003 2:54 AM PDTWeighted score: 5.7777777 Overall Rank: 1730 Comments:
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Dark Angle @ 65.151.239.38
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14-Aug-03/3:45 AM
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well that all depends on what nothing is, some say nothing doesnt exist, but if it doesnt, what is it then, if it does, then its obviously something, so what the hell is up with all this crazy shit
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Caducus @ 62.105.119.105
> Dark Angle
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14-Aug-03/5:18 AM
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I think she means if we felt nothing everything would be perfect in a way because we coul feel no pain but we who would love someone who felt nothing? I get it.
This is a pretty, but essentially vapid haiku. Which the fate of most haiku writers, unfortunately. But it flows nicely and works well.
By the way, I've never been to Cirencester, but the name makes it sound a most beguiling place.
I don't know the technicalities of a Haiku... but it is a seductive concept you've put here... 10
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