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Orbiting Venus (Free verse) by scitz
Lay down low,
Close your eyes and relax,
Iâll let my fingers flow,
just let these moments pass.
You smile seductively,
Like your bodyâs instructing me,
To tease it, bite it,
Please and delight it,
And I will kiss you outside and in,
In a riot of lip dragging movements,
Upon tepid brined skin.
You bite your bottom lip,
And drag at the hem of the sheets,
As it gets more intense they rip,
And I harshly rub your face with my palms,
Hoist your lower half up in my arms,
Opening your aroused Venus with my lips,,
Are like citrus clouds when the orange peel rips,
The flesh of forbidden fruit caramelizing my tongue,
And I will love you from dusk,
To the larks morning song.
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Arithmetic Mean: 7.3333335
Weighted score: 6.1666665
Overall Rank: 1029
Posted: July 2, 2003 11:55 AM PDT; Last modified: July 2, 2003 11:55 AM PDT
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"upon tepid brined skin."
tepid is like..less hot...moderately warm...lacking in passion. did you say it like that?
and brined....are u meaning salty?
good poem tho