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Orbiting Venus (Free verse) by scitz
Lay down low, Close your eyes and relax, I’ll let my fingers flow, just let these moments pass. You smile seductively, Like your body’s instructing me, To tease it, bite it, Please and delight it, And I will kiss you outside and in, In a riot of lip dragging movements, Upon tepid brined skin. You bite your bottom lip, And drag at the hem of the sheets, As it gets more intense they rip, And I harshly rub your face with my palms, Hoist your lower half up in my arms, Opening your aroused Venus with my lips,, Are like citrus clouds when the orange peel rips, The flesh of forbidden fruit caramelizing my tongue, And I will love you from dusk, To the larks morning song.

Down the ladder: Timber!

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Arithmetic Mean: 7.3333335
Weighted score: 6.1666665
Overall Rank: 1029
Posted: July 2, 2003 11:55 AM PDT; Last modified: July 2, 2003 11:55 AM PDT
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[9] DurtKL @ 68.75.22.35 | 2-Jul-03/12:02 PM | Reply
ahh nice imagery

"upon tepid brined skin."
tepid is like..less hot...moderately warm...lacking in passion. did you say it like that?
and brined....are u meaning salty?

good poem tho
[8] Jeremi B. Handrinos @ 24.126.113.154 | 2-Jul-03/1:00 PM | Reply
Lesbian.

One thing

Lark's
[9] Mona Lisa @ 195.92.168.168 | 2-Jul-03/1:35 PM | Reply
Some choice lines in here and you avoid smut and instead employ decorum in your expression.
Its very good and i see you have paid homage to us ladies. 9
[7] richa @ 81.86.250.240 | 3-Jul-03/6:54 AM | Reply
nice poem

not entirely unpornographic though
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