poemranker ::only pleasure left by richa

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Free verse № 53861

only pleasure left

Member since 2002 · Posted 24 Jun 2003 · Edited 24 Jun 2003 · 4 comments

A child does not need to squat on the rug, to look up to you grandma She does not condescend to hear your words, wrongly chosen When you talk, of your 'only pleasure that is left' she does not seek to question, Well take it from someone sat beside you, who can see the 'only' Part of the sentence, and your slouched bones, collapsed as a fire

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4 comments

[10] horus8 24-Jun-03/12:52 PM Reply
To dark for no reason, remove your last sentence entirely, and it would find the lowest level, trust me, I know.
[10] horus8 24-Jun-03/1:44 PM Reply
Precisely.
[10] SupremeDreamer 24-Jun-03/6:50 PM Reply
Indeed, beautiful work.
[9] Mr Pig 26-Jun-03/2:02 PM Reply
Keep it all, its dandy. (and besides your so methodical I bet you its all been sorted prior to it being on here