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Shut Up (Angry Progression) (Free verse) by thepinkbunnyofdoom You preach against preaching and scoff at hypocrites
Pull your self from your pulpit and sit your ass down
Cause I got a news flash for ya Mister
Your lying to yourself and burning bridges as you go
Talking bout shit you don't know
I've got a half a mind to kick your teeth in
Your just lucky I'm in a wheelchair buddy!!
Up the ladder:
The Sound of Love
Down the ladder:
In The Beginning
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Posted: June 17, 2003 2:36 PM PDT; Last modified: June 18, 2003 3:37 AM PDTWeighted score: 6.2727275 Overall Rank: 910 Comments:
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17-Jun-03/2:44 PM
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Put a beat to this and it'll fly high.
"But the other half is smarter than that
Oh wait! Did I say that?" it's great up until here, than it pooters out. replace that with "You're lucky I'm on vacation" or something to that effect. It shows possibility and humor, both of which you need in a piece like this.
This is pointless. Where's the story? You don't know shit about poetry do you?
If your looking for story read Either "my nieghborhood"(Though 1 is much better) or "sublime street morals"(One of the best I've done) and to a much lesser extent alot of my other poems.
yo yo yo
i'm mix masta mike and i'm here to say your poem sucks ass Why are you so gay? yo yo yo yo mike out
Yo Yo Yo
Mix master of disaster Mike If your going to try being witty okay But you seem to miss it so let me just say Your a bloody twit and I bet you've sucked more dick than I have anyday Yo Yo Yo Yo Shut Up
what is a wheel car?
like opposite to a car with no wheels? did you mean wheel chair? sorri bye
Typo Thanks.
dark angel, Oh wait i forgot the wings: -=Dark_Angel=-
why do u reply then deleate ur replies?
I rarely do. In fact I think that I've done that about 3 times ever(thats not counting when I did have that spree in the begining when I cleaned up several little petty arguement made with D.A. and myself). If you are refering to the pot comment it was made on "Something you'll never understand" and its still there. I know I replyed to the one here about how this wasn't written about D.A. but I have no clue why I deleted it. I seriously try not too Delete comments or my replies unless the user recieves e-mail notices and I feel that they are the only one the comment was intended for.
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