poemranker ::Shut Up (Angry Progression) by thepinkbunnyofdoom

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Shut Up (Angry Progression)

by thepinkbunnyofdoom

Member since 2003 · Posted 17 Jun 2003 · Edited 18 Jun 2003 · 11 comments

You preach against preaching and scoff at hypocrites Pull your self from your pulpit and sit your ass down Cause I got a news flash for ya Mister Your lying to yourself and burning bridges as you go Talking bout shit you don't know I've got a half a mind to kick your teeth in Your just lucky I'm in a wheelchair buddy!!

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[n/a] INTRANSIT 17-Jun-03/2:44 PM Reply
Put a beat to this and it'll fly high.
[n/a] horus8 17-Jun-03/4:32 PM Reply
"But the other half is smarter than that
Oh wait! Did I say that?" it's great up until here, than it pooters out. replace that with "You're lucky I'm on vacation" or something to that effect. It shows possibility and humor, both of which you need in a piece like this.
[0] god'swife 17-Jun-03/6:19 PM Reply
This is pointless. Where's the story? You don't know shit about poetry do you?
[n/a] thepinkbunnyofdoom › god'swife 17-Jun-03/9:53 PM Reply
If your looking for story read Either "my nieghborhood"(Though 1 is much better) or "sublime street morals"(One of the best I've done) and to a much lesser extent alot of my other poems.
[6] JoyLuck 18-Jun-03/12:46 AM Reply
yo yo yo

i'm mix masta mike
and i'm here to say
your poem sucks ass
Why are you so gay?

yo yo yo yo
mike out
[n/a] thepinkbunnyofdoom › JoyLuck 18-Jun-03/3:44 AM Reply
Yo Yo Yo

Mix master of disaster Mike
If your going to try being witty okay
But you seem to miss it so let me just say
Your a bloody twit and I bet you've sucked more dick than I have anyday

Yo Yo Yo Yo
Shut Up
[6] JoyLuck 18-Jun-03/12:48 AM Reply
what is a wheel car?
like opposite to a car with
no wheels?
did you mean wheel chair?
sorri
bye
[n/a] thepinkbunnyofdoom › JoyLuck 18-Jun-03/3:37 AM Reply
Typo Thanks.
[5] lunar 18-Jun-03/7:31 AM Reply
dark angel, Oh wait i forgot the wings: -=Dark_Angel=-
[5] lunar 20-Jun-03/12:47 PM Reply
why do u reply then deleate ur replies?
[n/a] thepinkbunnyofdoom › lunar 20-Jun-03/5:31 PM Reply
I rarely do. In fact I think that I've done that about 3 times ever(thats not counting when I did have that spree in the begining when I cleaned up several little petty arguement made with D.A. and myself). If you are refering to the pot comment it was made on "Something you'll never understand" and its still there. I know I replyed to the one here about how this wasn't written about D.A. but I have no clue why I deleted it. I seriously try not too Delete comments or my replies unless the user recieves e-mail notices and I feel that they are the only one the comment was intended for.