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moments lost in adversity (Free verse) by brazen
dropping the tangible life swallowed by muffled dreams i drug a motion in you pulled you away from the flame but all i had to live by was the ignorance of your lies and the brutality of your game. broken in the wind up north disdain pours across the mound filling your mouth with words that mean nothing to the heart as they follow your endless drought into a valley of misdeeds distorting all my optic feeds. silence is a bliss forgotten when i stare into your world never thought i'd dream of living the last day as it has unfurled...

Up the ladder: Of Growing
Down the ladder: under my skin

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Arithmetic Mean: 5.5
Weighted score: 5.0596013
Overall Rank: 6678
Posted: April 13, 2003 12:22 AM PDT; Last modified: April 28, 2003 10:55 PM PDT
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[6] Blindproject217 @ 68.38.194.4 | 28-Apr-03/11:13 PM | Reply
Im not so sure you could live by the ignorance of someones lies, unless you yourself were dumb enough to live by a lie that was ignorant. The first thing that comes to mind is following a religion that requires you to eat dog crap five times a day or the earth would swallow you whole. Now that would be living by the ignorance of someones lies. But anyways I liked the poem, -6-
[n/a] brazen @ 68.81.184.56 > Blindproject217 | 29-Apr-03/10:39 PM | Reply
and today we celebrate yet another genuine moment of hitting a nail directly on its head...congratulations, friend.
[n/a] brazen @ 68.81.184.56 > Blindproject217 | 29-Apr-03/10:40 PM | Reply
...of course meaning the whole religion thing...not me being an idiot.
[8] Bachus @ 24.126.113.154 | 29-Apr-03/12:41 AM | Reply
You make me feel guilty, and I wash my hands a lot?
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