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Gastric Sadness (Haiku) by waltfreakinwhitman
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Arithmetic Mean: 6.7
Weighted score: 5.85
Overall Rank: 1569
Posted: July 14, 2002 2:05 PM PDT; Last modified: July 14, 2002 2:05 PM PDT
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[7] horus8 @ 24.126.113.154 | 14-Jul-02/2:19 PM | Reply
The astrik side note is high-style, and cutet
[n/a] waltfreakinwhitman @ | 14-Jul-02/3:54 PM | Reply
Thanks. The Haiku form is pretty unforgiving. So I decided to expand the form with my use of the asterisk. This allows me to add crucial information to the poem that would otherwise be lost.
[8] Sailing Solo @ 152.163.188.194 | 14-Jul-02/11:23 PM | Reply
Didnt like it that ,uch, but I gave you an 8 just for your user name
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