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Lover's Portrait (Free verse) by Dancer I will paint your portrait
Your face will be sad
no sparkle in your eyes
no smile in your frown
And your body will be all twisted
Your hands will be green
the color of your skin will be grey
like its been beaten
I will show your dark heart
like the portrait of Jesus
but your picture will look hurt
you are of course
cause you finally realize how I feel
how you made me feel
when our love is gone
Up the ladder:
Our lord and saviour, the land of 60 million micks, as wonderful and noble as the pink empire.
Down the ladder:
Life on the Sidewalk (with superfluous vulgarisms)
Votes: (green: user, blue: anonymous)
Arithmetic Mean: 4.6153846
Posted: March 17, 2003 6:34 AM PST; Last modified: March 17, 2003 6:34 AM PSTWeighted score: 4.7188234 Overall Rank: 11935 Comments:
its not that bad, but it could be better the end is teen magazine style
u can make this better
God is was goods then in you chokie doo de in the hiccup.. last chirp pardon me. 7.i
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It's 'Jesu'.
It's a pile of toss.