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Charm (Villanelle) by OneFingerAnswer
With that accent from overseas He left joy and delight where walked Carrying himself as if on a breeze His charm brought others to their knees Everyone listened when he talked With that accent from overseas He could go where he may please Pass through door when he knocked Carrying himself as if on a breeze Talking farmers out of milk and cheese Gaining deals and leaving others shocked With that accent from overseas And if he hadn't had to sneeze This thief's exit may not have been blocked Carrying himself as if on a breeze Oh, now that I hold the keys In his cell he will stay locked With that accent from overseas Carrying himself as if on a breeze

Up the ladder: One of those days
Down the ladder: Broken

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Arithmetic Mean: 5.285714
Weighted score: 5.0768404
Overall Rank: 6504
Posted: March 13, 2003 2:00 AM PST; Last modified: March 13, 2003 3:30 AM PST
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[8] horus8 @ 24.126.113.154 | 13-Mar-03/3:16 AM | Reply
"bocked" i think you meant blocked? i giggled a bit at this one, cute. ummm. didn't want to talk to me about something? i suck at using instant mess, but you could call me if you want, or is that thought too provocative for you?a
[8] horus8 @ 24.126.113.154 > horus8 | 13-Mar-03/3:17 AM | Reply
I forgot a 'you' in there somewhere, sorry, it's damn late. goodnight.
[n/a] OneFingerAnswer @ 216.138.10.3 > horus8 | 13-Mar-03/3:29 AM | Reply
Yes it is late. That's where my typo came in too. Yeah I wanted to ask you for help on something, I'm not one who loves the phome though... maybe e-mail? crzyhorse18@yahoo or msn.com. I check both at least once a day.
[8] INTRANSIT @ 152.163.188.72 | 13-Mar-03/7:44 AM | Reply
Something very intriguing about the v-form. I can't figure its purpose quite yet.
[6] Zoe @ 172.214.160.179 | 6-Dec-05/5:43 AM | Reply
I must say that I like this: teh build up of character. Perhaps some words and phrases are not working hard enough, like 'carrying himslef as if on a breeze'. You could be more specific here maybe'. I would also like to have more concrete happenings described.
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