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Charm (Villanelle) by OneFingerAnswer

With that accent from overseas He left joy and delight where walked Carrying himself as if on a breeze His charm brought others to their knees Everyone listened when he talked With that accent from overseas He could go where he may please Pass through door when he knocked Carrying himself as if on a breeze Talking farmers out of milk and cheese Gaining deals and leaving others shocked With that accent from overseas And if he hadn't had to sneeze This thief's exit may not have been blocked Carrying himself as if on a breeze Oh, now that I hold the keys In his cell he will stay locked With that accent from overseas Carrying himself as if on a breeze

Zoe 6-Dec-05/5:43 AM
I must say that I like this: teh build up of character. Perhaps some words and phrases are not working hard enough, like 'carrying himslef as if on a breeze'. You could be more specific here maybe'. I would also like to have more concrete happenings described.




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