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red snow (Free verse) by sainthypro Tonight tonight
alone in a mist
a secret but I can tell this
Alone alone
noone around
cause yesterday the red snow came down
Dreaming, scheming
now i'm screaming
noone to settle my nerves
dreaming scheming
i'm still screaming
the snow is all around
We had hoped for peace one day
when nations walked hand in hand
but now on this god forsaken land
I am the only living man
Up the ladder:
Unwilling and Unknowing
Down the ladder:
Ring Toss
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Posted: July 12, 2002 7:34 PM PDT; Last modified: July 12, 2002 7:34 PM PDTWeighted score: 5.2777777 Overall Rank: 3779 Comments:
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Sigh'ense... @ 209.245.64.172
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31-Jul-02/9:21 AM
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oooohh, deep indeed. Could probably do without the second "dreaming, scheming" in stanza2. or not? Da1 said it.
we'd be more fucked if there was a woman with you trust me...the future is indeed bleek if this ones a-sexual.. people...somebody fetch my blow-gun, before he runs away alas'....the laser sighted! not the hindu-succubus powered prat dispatcher! ye wretched imp (i will cane him later) 'fore i ream your arse with my long nail..1/10!
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