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Love Under Will (Free verse) by Tyriana Through my Mirror of Floron I saw us both
"As above, so below", while the kundalini uncoiled
Lilith invoked, we sent the salt scattering from its circle.
I conjured spirits to divine some truth
yet through their Enochian howls
I swear I caught your name.
I charred the bones, inscribed the wax
in despair, I stood robed in the clearing.
A new-forged ring, a call unanswered, I left the glade.
Your will remains unbroken.
Up the ladder:
SEX
Down the ladder:
A Piano With No Keys
Votes: (green: user, blue: anonymous)
Arithmetic Mean: 5.857143
Posted: February 5, 2003 1:22 PM PST; Last modified: February 5, 2003 1:33 PM PSTWeighted score: 5.230521 Overall Rank: 4219 Comments:
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Tintagiles @ 207.179.173.37
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5-Feb-03/1:26 PM
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Brava... that's rather magnificent. The third stanza seems a bit weak, howe'er.
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Tyriana @ 192.197.142.54
> Tintagiles
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5-Feb-03/1:39 PM
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Yeah, I couldn't salvage it in the end, so I chopped the thing out altogether. Better to stick with the older arts anyway, I think.
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Tintagiles @ 198.164.242.88
> Tyriana
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5-Feb-03/6:08 PM
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But now it seems too short. Something's missing. I think the third stanza was needed, just in need of work.
but still feels incomplete. what is your bond? (i mean, i know it's love, but i want more from this.)
Hey, Zzin. First time I check out the 'ranker in months, and I post an opinion within 1 second of yours. Funny.
LOL
Do you LOL at me, good sir?
Do you understand how the indentation of a comment relates to its place in the hierarchy of the discussion?
My apologies. I was just skimming anyway.
Not long ago, I was batheing in a lake. I was nude. Then I was hit in the face with a flat stone. The dangerously stupid girl who threw the stone said she was "just skimming". Fortunately, I am fully trained in the Art of Facial Reppellence and was able to absorb the projectile on its third bounce using my Emergency Combat Glands. Next time, I might not be so lucky. So if you ever decide to spend your evenings "skimming" again, please make sure you are accompanied by a responsible adult and that you only use pretend stones or stones made out of cream cheese and/or chives. Good day.
Ooh yeah, I like this, even if I don't understand it. The words 'Under Will' seem to make sense; but, not sure how 'love' figures in the poem.
The `Love under Will`statement comes from Aleister Crowley`s Book of the Law. The Kundalini is Yogic, as was perceptively noticed. The second stanza comes from the writings of John Dee and the rest was derived from the Munich Handbook, a 15th century necromancer`s manual. Glad you liked it, though. It`s just love that`s been unrequited and how the other person doesn`t bend under the writer-magician`s will. Just using the magic as a metaphor.
Shhh... lest they learn too much, and bring things across which should not be spoken of.
lots of vivid words in this, its very well written and the 1st yoga reference i've seen in a poem, i'm impressed. -9-
My god. Zero. Terribly, earnestly zero. God, I do hate running across these witchy 'chaunts' here. "A new-forged ring," indeed. After reading this one, I find my ring enlarged by a magickal factor of 6.
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