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Love Under Will (Free verse) by Tyriana

Through my Mirror of Floron I saw us both "As above, so below", while the kundalini uncoiled Lilith invoked, we sent the salt scattering from its circle. I conjured spirits to divine some truth yet through their Enochian howls I swear I caught your name. I charred the bones, inscribed the wax in despair, I stood robed in the clearing. A new-forged ring, a call unanswered, I left the glade. Your will remains unbroken.

Tintagiles 5-Feb-03/6:08 PM
But now it seems too short. Something's missing. I think the third stanza was needed, just in need of work.




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