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The Long Walk Back (Ode) by Jigg
Caped, I walked twixt the night Guided only by moonlight Against the wind, her icy blast A forceful shadow, I did cast Upon the gate my journey came And against my judgement, I was swain I push'd open the wooden stile And inside a sight thou would'st revile Mine eye flitted to a fro From wizen'd hag and pitch black crow From spectral visions and potions bound My mind could not wrap around Such gazes of this terrible coven The air grew warm like in an oven I turn'd 'pon my heels and went to flee But they swoop'd and they prevented me To the floor, myself did spill And their cackling it did shrill And closing in for the kill Knives they raised, with gleaming hilts And then?...Awake in my bed These visions had all just been in my head But just one thing remains unsaid How can one dream when one is quite, quite dead?

Up the ladder: Still Alone
Down the ladder: Holly

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Arithmetic Mean: 4.939394
Weighted score: 4.9394145
Overall Rank: 9127
Posted: February 3, 2003 12:31 PM PST; Last modified: February 4, 2003 11:27 AM PST
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[7] deleted user @ 64.12.101.158 | 4-Feb-03/3:02 PM | Reply
not bad
[7] Caducus @ 62.105.88.10 | 5-Feb-03/9:00 AM | Reply
I imagined Olivier reading this with a skull in his hand, not a bad effort
[n/a] Jigg @ 62.6.79.163 > Caducus | 5-Feb-03/11:24 AM | Reply
Thank you both for the kind word. I am particularly enamoured withthe Olivier comment. High praise indeed, thank you.
[n/a] Tintagiles @ 207.179.185.234 | 11-Feb-03/6:14 PM | Reply
Bwahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahaha! Tee hee hee hee hee. Giggle giggle. I'm sorry, I haven't stopped giggling since I first read this. This is one of the funniest pieces I've ever read here. Please, please, PLEASE tell me this is one of your non-serious ones.
[n/a] Jigg @ 62.252.128.6 > Tintagiles | 12-Feb-03/2:50 PM | Reply
Well let's look at the evidence. The mock gothic flavour, the riseable rhyming scheme and the melodramatic finish. The very fact that you had to ask the question is a joke in itself. Is this one of your non-serious comments? NEXT!
[7] horus8 @ 24.126.113.154 | 16-Feb-03/7:34 PM | Reply
Gheto boys 1991 hit with a wiccan enima. joy.
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