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P.L. I wrote this in seven minutes at 1:36am. But I hope You can get the gist (Other) by smlink84 Misery and shame
Are his blame
He suffered,
For my name.
The flower of spring
Bloomed in winter,
Light of the world
Conviction like splinters.
How do I thank you,
How shall I praise you,
From my daily bread
I turn to you.
Up the ladder:
Horse Burgers
Down the ladder:
Red Skies and Thunderflies
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Posted: January 10, 2003 10:40 PM PST; Last modified: January 10, 2003 10:40 PM PSTWeighted score: 5.03842 Overall Rank: 7193 Comments:
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10-Jan-03/11:23 PM
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Why not start with a new title.
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Bill Z Bub @ 24.112.224.232
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11-Jan-03/7:58 AM
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That might help. Praise jesu.
Great use of "blame" and "name" to rhyme with "shame"!!! KEEP UP THE GREAT WORK! I'M SURE YOU'LL BE A POPULAR POETE IN NO TIME!!!!11
What's so bad about rhyming Blame name and shame? They are part of the poem and they have a distinct meaning. Like "name", Symbolic for "me".
7 minutes you say. That is sure to impress everyone that has the ability to appreciate things that don't make sense. It is a nice little diddy. -=Dark_Angel=- is so confusing. She disses the wierdest things,,, and now she turns around complements ppl? I thought she was sposed to dislike obvious talent?
You will hear many things about me, my child. There are certain people who do not wish to hear my views. They are trying to stifle my creativity, crush my soul and destroy my dreams. They are lucky I have not contacted the FBI.
"crush my dreams", your an idiot.
negritude prevails. total shit.
Hey Man-with-pants, better than mine, though mine was more confusing.;-) Gardez votre promenade avec Jesus!
Bearded-Man says, "inerestingly excellent.
heh. Nice.8
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