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Curse fait (Free verse) by Freethinker1602
The chill still runs through my body When I think about what was there God I had loved and what of it if I still do? Man I still want you I still long for the safety of your embrace I want to know the voice I hear is yours I want to sleep next to you in your bed I want to see your face when I first wake To look into your eyes To know that we belong with each other I still can't help but to see you as perfect It causes me pain to know that I can't be yours I don't know you as I used to I still want you that bad Why can't I just have you Though I know it would be better off If I were to accept you as my friend I know that you don't want to change that. It's time that I move on and yet my feet are weary I want to forget what I felt Just to move away from the pain of knowing That we can't love each other in the same way

Up the ladder: Strike Me Down

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Arithmetic Mean: 3.0
Weighted score: 4.7615943
Overall Rank: 11629
Posted: January 9, 2003 6:32 PM PST; Last modified: July 25, 2003 11:53 PM PDT
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Comments:
[10] ChunkyHunkyMonkey @ 205.188.209.107 | 9-Jan-03/6:45 PM | Reply
omg awww dat was so good i love it mami
[10] deleted user @ 166.90.25.43 | 9-Jan-03/6:46 PM | Reply
Beautiful poem. I can so relate 2 wat u feel.
[n/a] Freethinker1602 @ 68.48.88.129 > deleted user | 9-Jan-03/6:49 PM | Reply
y'all gotta know who this is about. damn I wish it weren't why
grrr I have no clue!!!
[7] Carvaceous @ 68.100.130.217 | 9-Jan-03/8:00 PM | Reply
Really good!!! But soooo sad!
[8] Ranger @ 212.219.142.161 | 10-Jan-03/12:54 AM | Reply
Nice work-4th line from last is very good! 8
[2] ecargo @ 64.252.64.253 | 10-Jan-03/10:00 AM | Reply
omg awww dat was so good i love it mami i can so rel8 2 wat u feel
[n/a] Freethinker1602 @ 68.48.88.129 > ecargo | 10-Jan-03/12:13 PM | Reply
Look here dingbat.....I think I have talent. Yet you gave me a two. Will you enjoy it when I jest at your longing? Ney I shall not sink to the level of a lowely and talentless baffoon. Therefore I shall rate your work accordingly. Pride is every one's down fall eventually. Be ware of your own words for some day they may anger some one.
[2] ecargo @ 64.252.77.151 | 10-Jan-03/12:35 PM | Reply
You sure I'm a baffoon? Not a bassoon or a buffoon? A buffet maybe? No--a bouquet!

Sorry to disillusion you JoyfulySlotterdKitty, but I gave you a two because your poem was juvenile, trite, and completely uninteresting both in content and execution. Nowhere did I "jest at your longing"--I did poke fun at a couple of the comments on it, but so? Get over it.
[n/a] Freethinker1602 @ 68.48.88.129 > ecargo | 12-Jan-03/7:47 PM | Reply
OK madd hatter no hair any where...You got no balls. For your info....ChunkyHunkyMonkey is my boyfriend, k? And KittyPricess is my friend. So you best not insult them. I am on a fresh wave of vengeance. Just you wait. I am a hunter and you will be slaughtered in a most unjoyfuly way
[n/a] Freethinker1602 @ 68.48.88.129 > ecargo | 12-Jan-03/7:54 PM | Reply
Ok look Madd Hatter No Hair Any Where....Ppl on here piss me off like hell...You all need to learn that one day you shall encurr my wrath most severe. The pain shall make you shed more than one tear. You will cower. For the better part of an hour. I will give something to you that is equally distasteful
[8] Topaz Servias @ 68.100.154.95 | 12-Jan-03/7:38 PM | Reply
So what if it's juvenile, Hare, it still is good ,and Kitty, he's entitled to his opinion, at least it wasn't zero, anything written in this site should garuntee at least a 1.
[n/a] Freethinker1602 @ 68.48.88.129 > Topaz Servias | 8-Mar-03/7:42 PM | Reply
Anything you say. And why did you call me kitty? I mean why? How on earth did it come about?
[n/a] horus8 @ 24.126.113.154 | 26-Jul-03/12:33 PM | Reply
A prostitute with a wooden clitoris, and ah... on ahhh, oh! on GHP, right? I'm getting closer though? Right? I think so, this is fun, it's better than that movie the Cell. And that's all that matters. It's like a scavenger hunt with that guy from slingblade "Not funny gay ha ha, funny queer, hmm ha.".
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