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what is he doing?? (Free verse) by xanthippe tiny bells echo
a damp shady empty room
then starts a hard rain
an elaborate jungle beat
life and air dancing
a didjeridoo
riding wind with a sitar
crickets sing in time
this electronic noise
stormy high beat en-trance
imagination
passing way beyond the clouds
carries me in light
lets choose to disperse
among the supernovas
Up the ladder:
Seven Little Pills
Down the ladder:
Alone
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Posted: December 27, 2002 11:51 PM PST; Last modified: December 27, 2002 11:51 PM PSTWeighted score: 4.713913 Overall Rank: 11956 Comments:
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SP REYNOLDS @ 216.244.18.134
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28-Dec-02/12:00 AM
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I think so - 7
second to last line: "let's choose"
you need the apostrophe. and that's about it. how do i describe this poem? pure. willing. complete.
thank you for the spellcheck (and i dont mean that in a mean way) and thank you for your comment/vote, i am glad you enjoyed it :) i will have to read some of yours if you have any (haven't checked yet) :D
yeah. i have a poem or two on the site.
i'll re-vote after your edit. 174 view(s)
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