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what is he doing?? (Free verse) by xanthippe

tiny bells echo a damp shady empty room then starts a hard rain an elaborate jungle beat life and air dancing a didjeridoo riding wind with a sitar crickets sing in time this electronic noise stormy high beat en-trance imagination passing way beyond the clouds carries me in light lets choose to disperse among the supernovas

<~> 28-Dec-02/12:10 AM
second to last line: "let's choose"
you need the apostrophe.
and that's about it.

how do i describe this poem?

pure. willing. complete.




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