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Ode № 24890

Ode to a Depleted Uranium Shell

by Yardbird

Member since 2002 · Posted 13 Nov 2002 · 17 comments

Small, curved, Beautifully sculpted, A masterpiece of the modern age! Admire it's grace, It's poise and charm, A it sings through the ethers! Marvel at the artistry As it tears through flesh, Cavorting through bone and sinew! See it simmer with mirth, As its hidden 'delights' finally claim The one that 'got away'.

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17 comments

[n/a] cleverdevice 13-Nov-02/2:39 AM Reply
Very good, I'm thinking incompetent yanks are to blame. Theres a story behind this. Do tell us some day.
[n/a] <~> 13-Nov-02/7:45 AM Reply
sparkly. how about an ode to a tenner?
[n/a] Yardbird › <~> 13-Nov-02/5:01 PM Reply
Sure - it's in the pipeline as we speak...
[7] Caducus 13-Nov-02/9:17 AM Reply
I feel guily for laughing at the last line, I like the angle your coming from, I'll email it to tony 'poodle' blair
[n/a] Yardbird › Caducus 13-Nov-02/5:12 PM Reply
Wahey! :)
[8] god'swife 13-Nov-02/9:24 AM Reply
Thank you! It is very sweet of you to answer my request. I don' get the visual of 'simmer with mirth' but that is my only criticism. If you did a bit of research a bet you could come up with a real killer, ha ha. Now when I look up DU on the web your poem will come up along with 100,000 other sites. You should be proud.
[n/a] Yardbird › god'swife 13-Nov-02/5:10 PM Reply
Cheers! The simmer with mirth was just an idea to get across the heat of the bullet, as well as the enjoyment it might have if it were alive - I know it's a crude device, but it sounded like a good idea at the time!!!
[9] INTRANSIT 13-Nov-02/10:26 AM Reply
Some days I wish it would shower us with it's envious love.
[6] horus8 13-Nov-02/12:29 PM Reply
jack the rippers tools of choice. a cock, a scalpel, and of course, the bone saw. piano string the neck? indeed. but above all it comes down to charisma for money and the woman in between....sugar wins the fly, but i sir, am a mantis. praying for you. have a six. good morning, and nice tie. christmas present? exactly.
[10] Ranger 25-Nov-02/5:00 AM Reply
Hee hee hee. You've really outdone yourself this time, Yardbird. Immensely funny, yet a frightening amount of realistic potential
(Don't ask) 10/10
[n/a] Yardbird › Ranger 25-Nov-02/5:13 AM Reply
Cheers for that, m8! :) 'Realistic potential' indeed! Next you'll be spouting on about 'the hypothetical viability of discoursing on the subject of one's cogitations' Where DO you learn all this bollocks?
[10] Ranger › Yardbird 9-Jan-03/8:14 AM Reply
From a bollocks-shop. Duh.
Anyhoo, still have a ten-ah, I think you're in the top fifteen now...probably won't last, sad fucks'll vote you out, but hey, this is a great poem!
[10] T'ien 25-Nov-02/5:45 AM Reply
hhmm dunno wot to make of it but i like it
[9] Nicholas Monson 4-Dec-02/4:24 AM Reply
Very clever. Very thought-provoking.
[0] deleted user 4-Dec-02/5:16 AM Reply
Timmy
[10] Ranger › deleted user 9-Jan-03/8:12 AM Reply
HAHAHAHA! Good one!
[7] Shuushin 5-Oct-06/7:12 AM Reply
The action is well described, as is the projectile's intent - but the imagery is primitive.