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Ode to a Depleted Uranium Shell (Ode) by Yardbird Small, curved,
Beautifully sculpted,
A masterpiece of the modern age!
Admire it's grace,
It's poise and charm,
A it sings through the ethers!
Marvel at the artistry
As it tears through flesh,
Cavorting through bone and sinew!
See it simmer with mirth,
As its hidden 'delights' finally claim
The one that 'got away'.
Up the ladder:
Delusions Of A Peaceful Place
Down the ladder:
we wear the cries
Votes: (green: user, blue: anonymous)
Arithmetic Mean: 5.5
Posted: November 13, 2002 2:22 AM PST; Last modified: November 13, 2002 2:22 AM PSTWeighted score: 5.491007 Overall Rank: 2806 Comments:
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cleverdevice @ 212.219.142.161
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13-Nov-02/2:39 AM
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Very good, I'm thinking incompetent yanks are to blame. Theres a story behind this. Do tell us some day.
sparkly. how about an ode to a tenner?
Sure - it's in the pipeline as we speak...
I feel guily for laughing at the last line, I like the angle your coming from, I'll email it to tony 'poodle' blair
Wahey! :)
Thank you! It is very sweet of you to answer my request. I don' get the visual of 'simmer with mirth' but that is my only criticism. If you did a bit of research a bet you could come up with a real killer, ha ha. Now when I look up DU on the web your poem will come up along with 100,000 other sites. You should be proud.
Cheers! The simmer with mirth was just an idea to get across the heat of the bullet, as well as the enjoyment it might have if it were alive - I know it's a crude device, but it sounded like a good idea at the time!!!
Some days I wish it would shower us with it's envious love.
jack the rippers tools of choice. a cock, a scalpel, and of course, the bone saw. piano string the neck? indeed. but above all it comes down to charisma for money and the woman in between....sugar wins the fly, but i sir, am a mantis. praying for you. have a six. good morning, and nice tie. christmas present? exactly.
Hee hee hee. You've really outdone yourself this time, Yardbird. Immensely funny, yet a frightening amount of realistic potential
(Don't ask) 10/10
Cheers for that, m8! :) 'Realistic potential' indeed! Next you'll be spouting on about 'the hypothetical viability of discoursing on the subject of one's cogitations' Where DO you learn all this bollocks?
From a bollocks-shop. Duh.
Anyhoo, still have a ten-ah, I think you're in the top fifteen now...probably won't last, sad fucks'll vote you out, but hey, this is a great poem!
hhmm dunno wot to make of it but i like it
Very clever. Very thought-provoking.
Timmy
HAHAHAHA! Good one!
The action is well described, as is the projectile's intent - but the imagery is primitive.
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