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Free verse № 24422

Spontaneous Combustion/The Moth

by ellisonandrew

Member since 2002 · Posted 9 Nov 2002 · 2 comments

You've been here 3 days now in this poky little 2nd bedroom or "My Room" as she calls it and each evening I have lunged overbalanced and missed you Tonight I realise you are far far stronger than I could ever wish to be as you taunt me getting closer, closer almost wanting me to attack but tonight I stayed calm and watched you as the light bulb disintegrated your lack of bones..

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[6] Roisin 9-Nov-02/6:36 AM Reply
Interesting. Yes, staying calm is the best way to attack. If who you want to attack is heading for demise the best way is to stay passive and watch it be! I liked the last line. Not sure about the relevance of the last line of first stanza. Is it appropriate to the rest of the poem?Also maybe realise was too strong a word to use as surely the moth is not stronger in the end?
[7] anitawit 9-Nov-02/11:51 AM Reply
I especially liked the last line and the second stanza of the poem. The last line of the first stanza does seem irrelevant, though.