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Spontaneous Combustion/The Moth (Free verse) by ellisonandrew

You've been here 3 days now in this poky little 2nd bedroom or "My Room" as she calls it and each evening I have lunged overbalanced and missed you Tonight I realise you are far far stronger than I could ever wish to be as you taunt me getting closer, closer almost wanting me to attack but tonight I stayed calm and watched you as the light bulb disintegrated your lack of bones..

Roisin 9-Nov-02/6:36 AM
Interesting. Yes, staying calm is the best way to attack. If who you want to attack is heading for demise the best way is to stay passive and watch it be! I liked the last line. Not sure about the relevance of the last line of first stanza. Is it appropriate to the rest of the poem?Also maybe realise was too strong a word to use as surely the moth is not stronger in the end?




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