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everyone sucks. (Free verse) by kliq Who shall I vote for?
A conservative who believes I should stay at home.
Or a labour man that would have me be a whore.
That is all the choice I have
And it's more than my mother ever wanted.
"Women should stay at home" she used to tell me
We should only cook, clean and be raped if needed
That was her opinion, she had even less choice.
My father never manhandled her
But he did what she told him to do
He had less power than her.
I don't want power, power is fickle.
Respect is cold.
Love is warm but unforgiving
All I want is choice.
Therefore I can choose to be cold.
Choose to be free.
And If I want to be a whore
Then I'll whore to the best of my ability
Do not forget that I am woman
I am all woman
And I will always be a woman.
The choice is mine.
Up the ladder:
At the Bottom of a Well
Down the ladder:
Thought
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Posted: November 6, 2002 4:29 AM PST; Last modified: November 6, 2002 4:29 AM PSTWeighted score: 5.388889 Overall Rank: 3202 Comments:
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6-Nov-02/5:47 AM
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I like the message. I think it could use some dressing up though.
I don't think the labour party want you to be whore. Mr. Blair is too nice a man for that. I think there's some middle ground between the housewife and the prostitute.
I love the ideas here especially S2. 'Love is warm...' is a very insightful line. last 4 lines S3 in particular need dressing up. I think you could really turn this into solid poem if you put more sentiment into it.
read the communist manifesto, then you can be a red whore waiting for the tanks in the square. 7.n
"And it's more than my mother ever wanted" is a great line worthy of refrain.
"less power than [she]" please (as in "less power than she had" not "less power than her had") last line is awkward; consider "... will always be a woman [with choice]." not too shabby at all - I choose to give it a nine. 166 view(s)
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