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everyone sucks. (Free verse) by kliq

Who shall I vote for? A conservative who believes I should stay at home. Or a labour man that would have me be a whore. That is all the choice I have And it's more than my mother ever wanted. "Women should stay at home" she used to tell me We should only cook, clean and be raped if needed That was her opinion, she had even less choice. My father never manhandled her But he did what she told him to do He had less power than her. I don't want power, power is fickle. Respect is cold. Love is warm but unforgiving All I want is choice. Therefore I can choose to be cold. Choose to be free. And If I want to be a whore Then I'll whore to the best of my ability Do not forget that I am woman I am all woman And I will always be a woman. The choice is mine.

Shuushin 7-Feb-04/7:45 AM
"And it's more than my mother ever wanted" is a great line worthy of refrain.

"less power than [she]" please (as in "less power than she had" not "less power than her had")

last line is awkward; consider "... will always be a woman [with choice]."

not too shabby at all - I choose to give it a nine.




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