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Fire And Fuck

by Bonehiss

Member since 2002 · Posted 30 Oct 2002 · Edited 16 Apr 2003 · 13 comments

Slamming whores Behind slamming doors, Get you limp to hard With a hammering heart. Your brain goes numb As your fingers run, Through wild skank hair. Rush! Rush! Time is short. Don't bother to sterilize. Just pack your rig. Rush again! Then finally, Spun-out, Pick at your toenails, As you watch Your once impressive Partying skills, Turn slowly, Into sad addiction.

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13 comments

[7] Caducus 27-Nov-02/4:33 AM Reply
I had the benefit of a few pointers you gave me on the comments page of your other work 'Another Chance'.
Thanks to the background I understand this perfectly but to the uninformed it may be difficult to comment on as theirs no indication to what the addiction is, and a need to know more may be the problem.
However i think its a strong piece-well done, just work with it, make a few drafts-try again and resubmit after careful edit.
[10] <{Baba^Yaga}> 13-Jan-03/3:19 PM Reply
you're obviously stupid, and have never been high a day in your life. Tell me how can you see ghosts when you've never seen life. idiot.
[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. › <{Baba^Yaga}> 13-Jan-03/3:49 PM Reply
You have such a way with words.
[n/a] <~> › -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 13-Jan-03/3:53 PM Reply
not to mention a kale gun.
[n/a] Bachus › -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 17-Apr-03/10:33 PM Reply
Words have no way less gaye.
[10] <{Baba^Yaga}> 13-Jan-03/4:25 PM Reply
"Rush! Rush! Rush!
Time is short.
Don't bother to sterilize.
Just pack your rig.
Rush again!
Then finally,
spun-out,
pick at your toenails"
what the addiction is?
yeah lets call a fucking board meeting.
obviously..coke or speed.
that aside....this is shit.
it's not going to help an addict, and it's not going to save the un-informed children of the planet earth, so..where does that leave us? exactly, buried up to our necks in shit poetry, and fucking idiots trying to write about slinkeys when they've been playing all along with barbies. idiotic shit. moronic retorts to moronic inuendos. basic run of the mill tripe. enjoy your keen observations and grasp of life. you'll need it when your kid comes home a junky. you can always read him/her this great compilation of their pain. idiot. here's a ten because that's how much respect i got for a voting system.
[n/a] Bonehiss › <{Baba^Yaga}> 14-Jan-03/4:18 AM Reply
Why don't you grow a set of balls and stick a half gram in your neck yourself? It might motivate you to spend more time polishing the tripe you've submitted. Silly little girl.
[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. › Bonehiss 14-Jan-03/4:11 PM Reply
TOP SECRET SUGGESTION: Please do not use the word 'tripe' except when referring to literal tripe. It is the most awful and overused word ever. It makes the wielder sound like they are a middle aged schoolmistress or a fifteen-year-old. My condolences if you are one of those things.
[n/a] Bonehiss › -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 14-Jan-03/4:26 PM Reply
I knew that. I was just 'tripeing' back.
[10] <{Baba^Yaga}> 13-Jan-03/4:29 PM Reply
change the title to "tire and duck".
[6] maffy 17-Apr-03/1:42 AM Reply
Its crazy 6
[5] bondjedi 17-Apr-03/4:02 AM Reply
it's about youth, I think. I give you a 5
[1] asimpleman 20-Apr-03/9:08 AM Reply
Were u molested as a child?