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Fire And Fuck (Free verse) by Bonehiss

Slamming whores Behind slamming doors, Get you limp to hard With a hammering heart. Your brain goes numb As your fingers run, Through wild skank hair. Rush! Rush! Time is short. Don't bother to sterilize. Just pack your rig. Rush again! Then finally, Spun-out, Pick at your toenails, As you watch Your once impressive Partying skills, Turn slowly, Into sad addiction.

Caducus 27-Nov-02/4:33 AM
I had the benefit of a few pointers you gave me on the comments page of your other work 'Another Chance'.
Thanks to the background I understand this perfectly but to the uninformed it may be difficult to comment on as theirs no indication to what the addiction is, and a need to know more may be the problem.
However i think its a strong piece-well done, just work with it, make a few drafts-try again and resubmit after careful edit.




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