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Free verse № 1898

Lonely Soul

by faded_twilight

Member since 2002 · Posted 13 May 2002 · 11 comments

Crying my eyes out My heart's bleeding For a man who might not even know How much I love him I can't tell him I can't bear to The rejection would kill me The revelation would shatter my heart And what would come of it? Nothing but anguish I can't bear the thought of rejection I would die from the pain My heart is dying from the pain It hurts so much My tears are my only comfort This is the life that I lead This is the pain of an lonely soul.

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11 comments

[0] nentwined 14-May-02/1:12 AM Reply
bleah. :(
[2] anonymous 14-May-02/1:18 AM Reply
Although you make use of novel themes in this poem, I felt you could have just written "I love someone who may not love me. This is unpleasant" and conveyed exactly the same thing.
[1] deleted user 14-May-02/7:44 AM Reply
yikes...why don't you read some poetry before submitting crap you think might be poetry?
[2] anonymous 19-May-02/5:01 PM Reply
hrmmm...the words that comet to mind while reading this poem, include: SAP, CLICHE, SUPERFICIAL....you can imagine the rest. it feels like you're just saying someone else's words here..your emotions are valid, but you should find a way to put them into words people haven't heard before. try putting your emotions into a context...a fan loving a rock star, a dancer falling in love with a client, poor with rich...be creative, and make me interested in your love
[2] anonymous 19-May-02/5:01 PM Reply
hrmmm...the words that comet to mind while reading this poem, include: SAP, CLICHE, SUPERFICIAL....you can imagine the rest. it feels like you're just saying someone else's words here..your emotions are valid, but you should find a way to put them into words people haven't heard before. try putting your emotions into a context...a fan loving a rock star, a dancer falling in love with a client, poor with rich...be creative, and make me interested in your love
[10] -=SeTTle=- 21-May-02/6:06 AM Reply
maybe if you were prettier and didn't whine so much. Really, there is nothing less attractive than pathetic girl poetry. Try growing a beard.
[1] webguy 12-Jul-02/3:51 AM Reply
Crying my eyes out My heart's bleeding is clich??; try new word marriages, that'll make it work
[10] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 14-Jul-02/4:12 PM Reply
E'en as I read this masterpiece, I broke wind in jubilation! A priceless classic! Don't listen to those other folks. They just like to criticise willy-nilly. Why do you think I have 5 poemes in the 'Worst' section? A travesty indeede.
[n/a] SoulSlippedAway 22-Jul-02/12:38 PM Reply
Well even though this I think has been written it's still pretty good.
[10] forsaken 20-Apr-05/2:18 PM Reply
I like this poem as I did your Hurting Heart one. I wish you had more on here, since I enjoy these more then any others. There's something about poems about being alone that always catch my eye. Do you have more on a different site?
[10] forsaken › forsaken 13-Jul-07/8:54 PM Reply
You still out there I haven't read these you so long. Don't ask me why cause I don't either, but I'd like to hear from you?