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Lonely Soul (Free verse) by faded_twilight

Crying my eyes out My heart's bleeding For a man who might not even know How much I love him I can't tell him I can't bear to The rejection would kill me The revelation would shatter my heart And what would come of it? Nothing but anguish I can't bear the thought of rejection I would die from the pain My heart is dying from the pain It hurts so much My tears are my only comfort This is the life that I lead This is the pain of an lonely soul.

anonymous 14-May-02/1:18 AM
Although you make use of novel themes in this poem, I felt you could have just written "I love someone who may not love me. This is unpleasant" and conveyed exactly the same thing.




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