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SUCH IS THE LOSS I FEEL (Free verse) by ARTIE Sometimes it is slow
other times it seems painful.
But I now know
from within the depths of my heart
I was prepared to believe in you
I believed you would be there...
forever.
I believed that you were different,
that you could be the one
to have heard such a beautiful song.
T’was the song from my heart
and why I felt broken when
at the loss of your touch
your innermost thoughts
the light in your eyes
and your everlasting smile.
I feel [broken] for such a loss.
Where are you now
when I need you the most?
Up the ladder:
Heart and Soul
Down the ladder:
At The End
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Posted: January 26, 2015 2:20 AM PST; Last modified: January 26, 2015 2:20 AM PSTWeighted score: 4.72186 Overall Rank: 11895 Comments:
Cliché, yeah, near pimple status? Oh... none of us want to know what parody i'd make of this... too fuckin easy, aye. Do you wish me to judge thy heart,
or thy ART? This poem.. I give a four, so that thy heart might not sour. :) 3 view(s)
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The T'was feels affected, and [broken] stands out in an odd way as you're not playing with/using punctuation anywhere else....