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HELP (Free verse) by LIL ZAY LORD I FEEL IM TO DEEP IN THIS GAME
EVERYDAY IT FEELS LIKE IM GOING INSANE
I TRY TO DO RIGHT BUT IM SURROUNDED BY WRONG
I CAN'T GET SLEEP AT NIGHT CAUSE IM WATCHING MY HOME
YOU SAID ASK AND YOU SHALL RECEIVE
WELL LORD I'VE CRIED,BEGGED,AND PLED
I DON'T WANT TO LIVE THIS LIFE NO MORE
BUT IT SEEMS LIKE YOU CLOSED AND THE DEVIL OPEN THE DOOR
YOU SAID I HAD A ANGEL WALKING WITH ME 24HRS A DAY
WHAT'S WRONG WITH MY ANGEL DO HE NOT KNOW WHERE I STAY
Up the ladder:
Love and negotiations
Down the ladder:
Lincolnshire
Votes: (green: user, blue: anonymous)
Arithmetic Mean: 4.357143
Posted: September 13, 2002 9:35 AM PDT; Last modified: September 13, 2002 9:35 AM PDTWeighted score: 4.5300336 Overall Rank: 12726 Comments:
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poetandknowit @ 65.101.213.62
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13-Sep-02/10:37 AM
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Hey, who gave this a 0. I kind of like it, minus the caps, but maybe he is hard of hearing from the mortar fire.
i agree, there's no way this is a 0. it has a very jazz age-harlem renaissance feel to it. like a streak from Ellison's Invisible Man.
.. yeah , nice and bluesy ... pity 'bout the suspect religiosity ..... 4
Department of Guardian Angels
Cloud 6 Heaven Dear LIL ZAY: We're afraid that your angel met with an accident; he was run over by a cement truck while sneaking away from you to go urinate. Unfortunately, we're rather understaffed right now, so it will be some time before we can get around to helping you. In fact, we may not be able to. We did ask for volunteers, but though one showed up, your obnoxious use of capitals turned him off -- he's rather delicate ears and didn't want to be yelled at all day. You could always ask the Devil -- he's rather a decent fellow if you ask the right way. Regretfully, Saint Gabriel Archangel Spokesperson for God Department of Guardian Angels Cloud 6 Heaven. 140 view(s)
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