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End (Free verse) by MacFrantic
Temple square And I am midnight to these people A dancing slip of wind Here the slaughtered boy The one with the chest wound And scratches across his face Asked if I would pray for death I told him I would do my part In saving him from despair But I never got the chance He was swept away by men in masks Who were carrying bags That sounded of metal when they ran And I stood there and watched him Taken away by the very darkness that surrounded me I did not step I did not look His screams died away and I left They found his body on Sunday In the dumpster by the public pool

Up the ladder: black boat blues
Down the ladder: razorblade kisses

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Arithmetic Mean: 3.5
Weighted score: 4.928861
Overall Rank: 9151
Posted: June 18, 2006 10:29 PM PDT; Last modified: June 18, 2006 10:29 PM PDT
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[7] amanda_dcosta @ 202.164.137.248 | 18-Jun-06/10:55 PM | Reply
I fell that this could be an excerpt from a story. somehow it gives me an eerie feeling. I don't particularly like death themes esp when settled around brutality.
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