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Until the Façade Comes Down (Free verse) by TLRufener For some things there are no words
There is no way to explain what we feel
Nothing we can do to make things better
We only desire the past
A past that we can no longer achieve
We stepped too far beyond that day
Everything has changed between us
Nothing more can be said
As we have already spoken too much
I have told you what is in my heart
And you have spoken what is in yours
You are content on the outside
I have erected a grand façade
As sturdy as it may appear, it is weak
One glance, one whisper, one smile
Will send it crashing to the ground
You have heard all I can speak
But there is so much more to be said
Without the strength to speak it
We are here in this exact second
And we shall stay until the façade comes down
Up the ladder:
can't you tell me?
Down the ladder:
Teenage Guidance
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Posted: December 3, 2005 9:18 PM PST; Last modified: December 3, 2005 9:18 PM PSTWeighted score: 4.970199 Overall Rank: 8463 Comments:
...And we without.
But you will. One as I. You and I as nothing. Everything we, a we(e) nothing therefor(e). I knew there was some good poetry in there.
First off, don't start a poem with "there are no words" and "there is no way to explain how I feel"....If there's no words and there's no way to explain it why did you write it? Better yet, why am I reading it?
This is a love letter, not a poem. It COULD be a poem if you look in there and find the poetry in it.
Facade.
Nope can't make that little tail thingy appear under my "C". 133 view(s)
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At best, you're only able to express a nine-word thought here. That is, you can't even express as sophisticated a thought as any of the sentences in this comment do - which, incidentally, aren't very sophisticated. Don't you think that limits your poetry just a little?
I do wish you'd occasionally acknowledge some of our comments. At least so we'll know you're choosing to disregard our criticisms and continue in your chosen style, rather than thinking - as we do - that you're just ignoring us or illiterate. If you respond, I promise to never post this comment again.