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~PROM MEANS 2 ME~ (Sestina) by T. Jonathron Remp
P eoeple having fun R eally stupid girls acting dumb O nly pouplar people allowed M om says i'm handsum S lap me in the face when i ask you to go with me U need help if ur going K icking me in the groin would feel nicer C ute chix avoiding me S nake bite is my excuse for not goin

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Weighted score: 4.8410625
Overall Rank: 10716
Posted: November 2, 2005 4:37 PM PST; Last modified: November 2, 2005 4:37 PM PST
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[7] zodiac @ 217.144.7.195 | 3-Nov-05/3:33 AM | Reply
In all seriousness, what do you do to get slapped for asking a girl to a dance? My theory: Pull out your wang and just say, 'Huh? Huuhhh?'
[n/a] ALChemy @ 24.74.101.159 | 3-Nov-05/6:31 AM | Reply
Aperrantly youor parants passt allong thiere traddishun
uv mispeling 2 U.

I don't know if your poem represents the prom very well but it's a perfect example of the second part.
[n/a] Dovina @ 209.247.222.98 | 4-Nov-05/11:25 AM | Reply
Acrostic, not sestina.
[n/a] T. Jonathron Remp @ 69.151.10.36 > Dovina | 6-Nov-05/6:53 PM | Reply
Thanks for the tip!
[4] terbenaw @ 68.127.115.210 | 27-Feb-06/12:07 AM | Reply
Hmm... someone sounds pretty bitter. I'm not feeling what you're saying, but you do get your point across OK. This sounds like something that can be used in some sort of song. Also, this is not a sestina.
[n/a] T. Jonathron Remp @ 128.252.229.185 > terbenaw | 28-Feb-06/1:56 PM | Reply
This is QUITE a sestina. The definition of sestina provided by kaolin fire is wrong. Sestina comes from the Latin root Sest- meaning to Sustain, and a connecting -i, with -na verbal form suffix, all together meaning to be Sustained. If it did not shout out from my beautiful sestina itself, I will rephrase: My pain, as suffered, did QUITE sustain, terbenaw, and I do hope that goes without further interpretation, by golly. I've heard other blashpemes accusing my sestina poem as something called an Acrostic. This is such not the case. Look no further than the Latin roots forming the word Acrostic: Acro-, meaning above, or beyond; Sti- meaning a Stick; and -c, adverjection forming suffix; all together, meaning One Whom Flogs. I don't see any evidence of flogging in my poem, outside of the heart pains and other wrenching of organs of arbitrary traditional function. Be it as it might, without the proper instrumentation for you knowing any other so, I will take this opportunity to remind your Soul that I have IN FACT published the above manuscription in song format, and your transductional radio appendage will soon hear for you its radio waves and flap for you the necessary air pressure fluctuations GOOD DAY MISSUS.
[4] terbenaw @ 69.230.27.75 > T. Jonathron Remp | 9-Mar-06/2:59 AM | Reply
No offense man, but... all the Latin aside, this is not a sestina by POETIC STANDARDS. I care not of the root origins of the word, nor of what led you to believe that this is actually a sestina. The fact of the matter is: This is an Acroustic, not a Sestina. I did not base my definition off of kaolin fire's description of a sestina. Look it up ANYWHERE outside of your mind, and you will find that I am correct. If you find a site that disagrees, post it for us all to see. I'm sure we all would like to know what a sestina really is...
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